Lesson No. 3: No Ideas But in Things with Sarah Herrington

A song/story about a CANNON BALL (specific object!) and being the last splash 🙂  

 

Welcome back

 In this lesson, we keep exploring how looking closely produces art, and is an art in and of itself.  We’ve looked inside our selves (body/breath), outside (the streets, outside world).  This week I want to think about the OBJECTS we might be looking at.  I argue that each object/thing, offers up a world.  The more we can get to know OUR objects, and listen to them and stay true to them, the more unique and true our writing will be.

For example, I for one have learned that if you want to really get to know a character in a scene, describe SPECIFIC objects in his or her room.  If you are stuck on something to write, look around at your own objects, study them, think about why they carry importance, what stories they tell.

OBJECTS:

Poet William Carlos Williams wrote, “No ideas but in things.”

Our writing is not only made up of THINGS to build vision, setting, meaning, but really objects can open up a whole world for us.  Looking at one object can evoke feelings, memories….placing an object in a story can anchor it.

And, eventually, the story itself is an object.  The sentences are objects.  Words are objects.  We build and build.

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*so much depends on our objects

Reading Assignment

The Red Wheelbarrow by WCW & essay, a celebration of LOOKING CLOSELY, he almost stacks his images in a poem made of one line, conjuring up a world (this Modernist poem is not for everyone, but is a great example of IMAGE IMAGE OBJECT OBJECT)

The Wikipedia Page on the Red Wheelbarrow (may we all have Wikipedia pages about a poem someday 🙂

Pet Milk by Stuart Dybek, a story which the object of condensed milk is important (perhaps the whole story swirls out from it)

 *in Pet Milk, an ordinary object works as a TRIGGER to a whole world of memory

Writing Assignment

Sit for a moment, pen and computer tucked away, and think about your THINGS.

What objects hold importance for you? 
Then, grab the pen or laptop and make a list.

After, choose one object and use it as the central object in a new piece of writing.  You may find that one object works to attract other objects.  You might find your one object opens up a whole setting (for example, if your object is COW, a farm might be born or a slaughterhouse, if your object is BELL, a school band, a teacher’s desk, a monastery)

Write either a poem, story, or essay, by LISTENING to the words your OBJECT wants to tell.

 

Sarah Herrington’s writing has appeared in the New York Times, San Francisco Chronicle, Writer’s Digest and she was named a Poet to Watch by Oprah Magazine. She is the author of a collection of poetry, Always Moving (Bowery Books, 2011) and several nonfiction books, including Om Schooled (Addriya Press, 2012), and Essential Yoga (Fair Winds Press, 2013). In addition to writing, she is an advocate for mindfulness and creativity and is the founder and lead facilitator of OM Schooled Teacher Trainings. Sarah is a graduate of New York University’s English and Creative Writing programs and holds an MFA in Creative Writing through Lesley University.  She is a grateful member of the Bowery Poetry Club community and has worked for Gotham Writers’ Workshop and Girls Write Now. She divides her time between New York and California.

Discovering Metaphor within the Textures of Your Narratives

A metaphor is an analogy identifying one object with another and ascribing to the first object one or more of the qualities of the second…. The tenor is the idea being expressed or the subject of the comparison; the vehicle is the image by which this idea is conveyed or the subject communicated. (A Handbook to Literature)

Metaphor and Simile

The simplest distinction between kinds of comparison, and usually the first one grasped by beginning students of literature, is between metaphor and simile. A simile makes a comparison with the use of like or as, a meatphor without. Thought this distinction is technical, it is not entirely triviial, for a metaphor demands a more literal acceptance. If you say, “A woman is a rose,” you ask for an extreme suspension of disbelief, whereas “A woman is like a rose” acknoledges the artifice in the statement . . . . (Writing Fiction)

The Cliche Metaphor

Cliche metaphors are metaphors so familiar that they have lost the force of their original meaning. They are inevitably apt comparisons; if they were not, they would’t have been repeated often enough to become cliches. But such images fail to surprise, and we blame the writer for this expenditure of energy without a payoff. (Writing Fiction)

The Far-Fetched Metaphor

Far-fetched metaphors are the opposite of cliches: They surprise but are not apt. As the dead metaphor far-fetched suggests, the mind must travel too far to carry back the likeness, and too much is lost on the way. When such a comparison does work, we speak laudatorily of a “leap of the imagination.” But when it does not, what we face is in effect a failed conceit: The explantation of what is alike about these two things does not convince. Very good writers in the search for originality sometimes fetch too far. (Writing Fiction)

The Mixed Metaphor

Mixed metaphors are so called because they ask us to compare the original image with things from two or more different areas of reference: As you walk the path of life, don’t founder on the reefs of ignorance. Life can be a path or a sea bu it cannot be both at the same time. The point of the metaphor is to fuse two images in a single tension. The mind is adamantly unwilling to fuse three. (Writing Fiction)

The Obscure and Overdone Metaphor

Obscure and overdone metaphors falter because the author has misjudged the difficulty of the comparison. The result is either confusion or an insult to the reader’s intelligence. In the case of obscurity, a similarity in the author’s mind isn’t getting onto the page. (Writing Fiction)

Metaphor in Binocular Vision by Edith Pearlman

There are many craft elements to value and cherish within Edith Pearlman’s Binocular Vision, but arguably, one of the more cherished beauties is how she earns extended metaphor within a single, short paragraph. In the short story, “Inbound,” the narrator, Sophie, makes a connection between a comment made by her father and her little sister, Lily, who has Down’s Syndrome: 

“Lily clarifies life,” Sophie had heard her father say to one of his friends. Sophie didn’t agree. Clarity you could get by putting on glasses; or you could skim foam off warm butter—her mother had shown her how—leaving a thin yellow liquid that couldn’t even hold crackers together. Lily didn’t clarify; she softened things and made them sticky. Sophie and each parent had been separate individuals before Lily came. Now all four melted together….

In this very short paragraph, Pearlman introduces and earns an organic and extended metaphor born from the narrative versus a metaphor or analogy imposed upon the narrative in a way that feels forced and author driven.

Often, we struggle with metaphor: how to discover metaphor within the organic textures of our narratives rather than force metaphors upon our narratives.

In the above example from “Inbound,” the reader senses a depth of history, characterization, connection and foreshadowing, all accomplished within a short paragraph. The craft is so smooth and certain one might assume the passage came swiftly and without much effort; however, it may have taken Pearlman months or even years to perfect this single paragraph. Then again, it might have come to her in a single moment. However this passage came to Perlman, it was born so thoroughly from the characters—Sophie, her sister, mother and father—that it is not only believable, it is essential.

 

Searching Mundane and Common Character Details for Authentic Metaphors

The simplicity of butter and the process of clarifying is a mundane detail, a cooking lesson common between mothers and daughters. The father using this common detail to explain Sophie’s sister and her impact upon the family is believable. Sophie questioning detail and its accuracy provides a turn and defining moment for Sophie. She is a girl who values logic and keeps her own counsel. In this short paragraph, Pearlman earns our interest, our trust and our wonder.

 

Writing Exercise

Choose a short story you’ve already written. Scan the story for a metaphor you would like to further explore and revise then ask the following. Does the metaphor:

  1. Connect one or more main characters from the chapter or preceding several paragraphs?
  2. Further the reader’s knowledge of the narrator and/or protagonist?
  3. Provide a sense of foreshadowing?
  4. Provide an organic sense of detail that suits the setting and characters? (For instance, are you using a medieval reference for a contemporary character who knows little to nothing about medieval history?)

This last question is key. Too often writers will force metaphor and detail upon their characters because the detail is interesting to the writer. In early drafting phases this is okay because the writer is still in an exploration phase of the writing process. However, in later revisions, the writer must be weary of how closely the details reflect self and/or character and be on alert for moments when the writer’s details have taken over the character’s details. When our characters begin showing us where they are different than us, our characters are taking true form and shape. Of course, there are writers who write self again and again, and this can work, but the writer must still ask whether or not the characters have been fully explored.

 

Writing Guidelines

First Draft: As you explore and rewrite the metaphor, remember, this will essentially be a first draft again so let your creativity go where it needs to go. If you discover something entirely new about your characters, allow this to continue, keep writing. You might find you have an entirely new story or an additional story. This is okay. Let your characters lead you. 

Second Draft:  You aren’t under any quick turnaround deadlines, so take your time with this draft. Don’t worry yet about the line edits and so on. Be curious and authentic to your narrative and characters. Ask questions, logic questions, personality questions, detail questions.

Third Draft: Read through again, and revise for language and lyricism. Now, lay the work aside for at least a day, few weeks, months, before your next step. In the meantime, explore another metaphor from the same work or another work.

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WEEK FIVE: The Dream Machine and Cut Up Technique

Eckleburg Workshops - Magic Realism Workshop

 

The above film documents an intermedia collaboration between writers, artists and musicians, all of which is a dedication to the writer, artist, spoken word performer Brion Gysin. Gysin created the cut up technique and the Dream Machine and was integral to the Beat Generation heralded by William S. Burroughs as “the only man I ever respected.”  

Gysin was an artist from the Dadaist era. He studied at the Sorbonne. His artistic techniques became inspirational to Burroughs, Jack Kerouac, Allen Ginsberg, David Bowie and many more writers and musicians of his time and ongoing. The beauty of the cut up technique and the dream machine are that they use the writers’ imagination and existing words in order to push the developing narrative further.  We’re going to use these techniques to create magic realist stories.

So often, writers, especially new writers, will work extra hard to develop the “big narrative ideas.” These writers will strive for concepts that are “wowing” and outside their normal everyday lives. The magic realist writer will try and focus on a big magical setting or event, when really, the best narratives usually come from the mundane and familiar with a subtle dash of the magical. We’re going to explore your mundane and familiar and look for your organic “magic.” Writers are often delightfully surprised when they realize how much imagination and “magic” can come from their everyday, mundane lives if only they will stop trying to be and write what they are not. Before we step into these techniques, first, a little background on the dream machine and the cut up technique.

 

The Dream Machine

HISTORY

“The use of flickering light can be traced back to ancient civilizations when humans would congregate around fires and peer into the shimmers. Shamans and mystics often used images provoked from fire to strengthen visionary power. Many believed the flickering light to be paths or doorways to God.

In 200 A.D. the Roman mathematician and astronomer Ptolemy spun a fanned wheel between the sun and his observers. Ptolemy sketched the patterns that emerged from eyelids and noted that his subjects reported a state of peace and euphoria.

The French visionary Nostradamus also utilized flickering light to induce his psychic powers. There are legends that describe Nostradamus sitting inside a tower gazing directly into the sun while moving his fingers quickly over his eyelids. Czech physician and physiologist, Jan E. Purkinje conducted one of the first scientific investigations into the phenomenon.

In the 19th century Purkinje opened the world’s first physiology laboratory and is known for his vast contributions to neuroscience and physical health. Purkinje discovered the basic knowledge of optics. Purkinje also coined the term ’plasma’ and ‘protoplasm’ and discovered that fingerprints are unique. In a similar experiment as Ptolemy, Purkinje observed photic stimulation when he sat in front of a spinning wheel positioned between himself and the sun. He noticed with his eyes closed that his focus concentrated and then recorded the patterns and structures that appeared behind his eyelids” (Geiger, 2003, Dream Machine).


 

CONTEMPORARY INVESTIGATIONS

“Following in the footsteps of Purkinje was the neurophysiologist Dr. W. Grey Walter. Dr. Walter was a fierce explorer of the mind and in the 1930s was a pioneer in the use of EEG (electroencephalograph) machine. Walter is also known as the father of artificial intelligence. Walter published many of his findings and brought his thoughts to mainstream audiences through the publication of the book “The Living Brain”.

In this book, Walter proposed that photic stimulation could modulate brain waves and produce geometric images consistent with Jungian archetypes behind a person’s eyelids. These moving geometric patterns were similar to watching a film passing. After an extensive study, he noted that brain frequencies were of important investigation.

Walter concluded that flickering light could induce alpha brain wave activity. He observed that the brain frequencies within the alpha band dissipated when our brain was involved in purposeful activities and to do lists. Walter suggested that frequencies within the alpha frequency could dissolve physiological barriers between brain regions. According to Walter (1953), ‘The flash rate could be changed quickly by turning a knob and at certain frequencies the rhythmic series of flashes appear to be breaking down some of the physiological barriers between different regions of the brain. This meant that stimulus of the flicker received in the visual projection area of the cortex was breaking balance; its ripples were overflowing into other areas'” (Dream Machine).

 

ART- THE EVOLUTION FROM SCIENCE INTO ART

“One day artist Brion Gysin was traveling on a bus with his eyes closed and he noticed flickering sunlight dancing within a grove of trees. He was overcome by beautiful visions and sensations. In 1960s, Walter’s book ‘The Living Brain’ was passing between scholars, artists and writers. Brion Gysin, an artist, poet and writer, was inspired after reading Walter’s findings. This experience combined with Walter’s findings fueled his desire to replicate the experience.

Gysin began working in collaboration with Ian Somerville, a Cambridge University mathematics student. A combination of artistic ingenuity, minimal resources and fierce intellect coalesced in the invention of the Dreamachine. The Dreamachine’s components consisted of a cylinder with mathematically designed slots based upon Sufic geometry, a hanging light bulb, and 78-rpm turntable.

The turntable and the cylinder were adhered together, while a light bulb was suspended from the ceiling and placed into the center of the cylinder. When the turntable begins to rotate at 78 rpm, pulses of light flash in the frequencies of 8 to 13 pulses per second. Gysin’s life’s work with Dreamachine is noted as assisting in his development of literary devices such as the cut-up technique, writing poetry and extending the limits of calligraphy.

The word spread about the invention of this machine within the worldwide artistic community and many have described it as a mental television. The use of this machine caught on within the circuit of musicians and many artists. Notable artists Brian Jones, Paul McCartney, Kurt Cobain, Allen Ginsberg and William S. Burroughs utilized the machine to accelerate their creative potential” (Geiger, 2003, Dream Machine).

 

The Cut Up Technique

“The Cut-Up technique is to writing what collage is to visual art. Its recent use was pioneered by William Burroughs and Brion Gysin, and later David Bowie used it during the 1970s. The basic method is simple — write a piece of work, cut the paper up with scissors, and rearrange the pieces to form new phrases and new meanings.

The best writing seems to be done almost by accident but writers until the cut-up method was made explicit … had no way to produce the accident of spontaneity. You cannot will spontaneity. But you can introduce the spontaneous factor with a pair of scissors. (William S. Burroughs)

Obviously, using this method can and will produce results which you’re not happy with, but the surprising thing is how many of the results are successful. Sometimes all that is needed is a quick read through of the results, adding punctuation and deleting the occasional word to produce the finished results. Purists might complain about editing the cut-up text, but this process is a tool which you can choose to use at any stage in the process of writing” (The Lazarus Corporation).

The Lazarus Corporation offers a digital cut up machine where you can copy and paste a story and “cut it up” then study the resulting word collage for new and interesting ideas. 

 

Writing Assignment

This week, you are going to dream a magic realist work, write the work then cut it up. You’ll submit two different versions of this work, your original/linear piece and then your cut up piece. Follow the directions below. (Note: If you are prone to light sensitivity or epilepsy, PLEASE do not try The Dream Machine, instead, create your original work as you normally would and focus purely on the cut up technique.)

  1. Mindfully explore something completely familiar and normal in your everyday life–i.e. washing dishes, driving to work, sitting in a cubicle, eating your lunch, making dinner… Sit for five minutes or more and simply think on this. Recreate the feeling of it, the smells, the textures… 
  2. Use white noise to clear your head and focus. Go to white noise and simply listen for a few minutes. At this site, you’ll also find pink noise and brown noise with an oscillation option. Use whichever settings feel best to you. Let your mind clear and relax.
  3. Now, take your smartphone or laptop into a room with no windows. If you have neither a smartphone nor laptop, darken the room with your computer as much as possible. Turn off the lights. Go to Dream Machine and follow the directions. For at least five minutes, hopefully more but whatever is comfortable for you, close your eyes, sit close to the screen and let the light pulsations do their work. Allow your mind to go where it goes. You may find yourself returning to your familiar activity. What images come up? How might they be related, unrelated? Allow these images to create for you a tapestry of seemingly unrelated or related ideas. There is no right or wrong answer here. You are practicing a form of mindful meditation without controlling it. Whatever comes up for you as subject and image is exactly the focus that is perfect for you. (Again, if you are photosensitive or prone to seizures, DO NOT use the dream machine. Instead, put in ear buds and continue with the white noise. If you can, use your smartphone and take a walk around the block. The combined white noise and rhythmic movement will focus you and ready your mind for creative thought. If you find you can creatively explore while listening to the white noise then let this process happen. If the white noise focuses you purely on the noise, then find a quiet place to rest, turn off the white noise and return to the completely familiar and normal activity in your everyday life. Just sit and think on it.)
  4. Now, leave the dream machine and sit with your journal or laptop, whichever you use most to write, and begin free-writing about the experience of sitting with the dream machine, the light patterns, how the darkness felt… As you write about the experience allow any images you “saw” to become part of this free-write. Explain how the “familiar activity” presented itself. It is okay if the experience did not conjure “big narrative ideas.” Simply write about the experience as it happened. Don’t try to push it. 
  5. Now, clean up your free-write so that it is no more than 1000 words. Type it, if it isn’t already typed. It is okay if the narrative is realist and mundane.
  6. Visit, the cut up machine, and enter your text of 1000 words or less. Cut it.
  7. Now copy paste your cut up text into a separate word document. Read it in all its crazy, jumbled state. Look for interesting phrases, words, juxtapositions. Notice how many of the words are familiar and “commonplace.” Look for a phrase that most jumps out as different, extraordinary. This will be a point of “magic” in your story.
  8. Pull these interesting cut up phrases from the cut up text and make them part of your original, linear text. You can simply place them at the end until you’ve had time to consider and splice them into the original text. Allow the cut up phrases to take over the focus of the original text. Notice how the text changes. A single interesting cut up phrase can sometimes be the seeds of surprising genius.
  9. Now, give your narrative a day or two to rest. It is okay if it feels unfinished. Come back to it with objectivity and rewrite, revise, etc. At this point, if you haven’t already found your magic realist moment, start asking questions about the setting, such as, What if the chair spoke to the person sitting in it. What would it say?
  10. Submit both the original, linear freewrite and the revised version after your cut up.

*The main purpose of using the dream machine and cut up technique is to exercise the subconscious power of your imagination, tap into your organic “magic” and bring out concepts in your imagination that you might not have otherwise experienced. If by the end of using the dream machine and cut up technique, you haven’t found the seeds of your magic realist story, that’s okay. The dream machine and cut up technique aren’t for everyone. But it’s good that you’ve tried it and know where you stand. In this case, go ahead and write the short short story, 1000 words or less, as mundane and realist. It’s okay. As you write this mundane and realist scene, ask yourself questions. For instance, if you are writing about a woman who is standing at the kitchen sink, washing dishes, ask what the dishes might say if they could speak? Perhaps a teacup speaks to the woman. It tells the woman a story about a little girl. Ask what the story is about. How does this little girl reflect the woman? What are the details of this speaking teacup? Whatever you do, make sure that the activity is familiar and personal to you so that your focus isn’t on a new activity you must research but rather turning your familiar and mundane into an imaginative narrative with a subtle magic.  

 

Discussion

How did the dream machine and cut up technique go? Were they strange? Uncomfortable? Unexpectedly calming…? Did they focus you or rattle you? Will you try them again? Again, no right or wrong answers here.